Please revise to the rubric guidlines and professor feedback.
Below is the professors feedback:
aim to provide rich details that help to establish the significance of your topic. For example, an exemplary response in Project Part One will offer a contextualized description to carefully identify why the issue is important to you personally or professionally, or how it is significant to society as a whole.
An exemplary response will provide a clear description of at least three academic science sources; discuss how those sources compare, and why they are appropriate and relevant for investigating your topic; and describe what your thought process was like when searching for your sources. Remember to focus on empirical evidence found in your sources since you will use that information in your Project Part Two in Modules Seven and Eight.
The question you formulated may be related to the topic, but may not be specific enough, or it may not be based on the review of science resources you have selected.
To elevate your discussion of the audience to exemplary in Project Part One, consider how you can demonstrate insights into your issue and your research question. For example, you could provide details that support who would benefit most from hearing your message, based on what you learned about your issue in your research, or who you could best help in addressing your issue, based on your research.
You have a good start to your description of how and why you can tailor your message to your audience, but there are some gaps in specific examples or citation/research support. The key here is to think carefully about the audience you chose in the previous section and then to jot down a list of ideas in your notes of ways you will tailor your message to reach those audience members. Remember, what you say and how you say it depends on the person whom you are addressing, as explained in section 4.1 in Soomo. You know your instructor is your reader; however, the goal here is to think about a specific audience and strategize to tailor your message to that group. You are the expert so how can you guide them? What is necessary for an in-depth discussion and what can you shorten? For example, you have learned scientific terminology and principles that your audience may not understand. How can you explain these in a way that is relatable to your audience? You will also need to use specific examples from your research, which may need to be tailored for your specific audience.
Great job identifying natural science principles, such as a scientific fact, concept, or theory, that apply to your issue and your question. You have also cited your sources to show that your response reflects research. As you have learned, natural science principles are guiding ideas based on accepted scientific evidence, and the principles you identified reflect this accurately. For Project Part One, an exemplary response would take this a step further. For example, to demonstrate insight into essential natural science principles, first revisit your issue and question. Then consider how they are related to accepted scientific evidence and consider adding to your discussion here. Offer rich details to support your response.
This was the last research-heavy section of the draft. Good work explaining how your identified principles applied to your issue and question. You have also cited your sources to show that your response reflects research. This element gave you an opportunity to consider how natural science principles are relevant to your question and issue, which probably led to a clearer understanding of your issue as you consulted sources to determine the application of this principle. To develop this further for Project Part One, consider how you can demonstrate insight into essential natural science principles, using rich detail you have learned in your research about your issue and question, and details related to natural science principles.
You have formulated a hypothesis that addresses your question, but your hypothesis is not based on your investigation of that research question. As such, it may not be testable. Remember that a hypothesis is an important part of the scientific process because it gives the scientist a basis to design the experiment needed to answer the research question. It is an educated guess that tentatively answers the research question based on prior knowledge, research, and experiences. It is usually written in the “if-then” format. For example, if your research question is “What is the impact of climate change on the maple industry in New England?,” an example hypothesis would be “If climate change continues, then the maple industry in New England will be severely impacted due to the shortening of the maple sugar season.” Notice how the hypothesis provides a tentative and testable answer to the research question. Formulating your hypothesis now will help to prepare you for Project Part Two in Modules Seven and Eight, where you will illustrate how your investigation of your issue impacted the way you thought about the issue by thinking like a scientist and using the scientific process.
In this second part of your concluding section of the draft, you did a great job explaining how a natural scientist would go about collecting evidence to support or refute the hypothesis you formulated, and you supported your response with the natural science resources that you selected. Nicely done. The next steps a scientist would take to continue researching their hypothesis include collecting data or conducting an experiment to test the hypothesis, as reviewed in section 5.1.4 in Soomo. To elevate this to exemplary in Project Part One in Module Six, continue developing your discussion of collecting evidence so that your response demonstrates a clear understanding of scientific thinking and the scientific process.
