Need to rewrite it with a clearer argument from the beginning. What did BB do and why do they matter? You want to make your claim/thesis in your intro and then use the body paragraphs to provide evidence, content, and analysis to prove your thesis. Right now, there is no thesis. There are a lot of facts and information, but there is no concrete argument you are making for why this organization matters and why we should care about them. Last, you have some academic sources here, books, mixed in with nonacademic sources. Make sure the final draft has at least three academic sources.
