Hello, this is an portfolio asssignment that the outcome reflects my level of experience targeting a course to be credirted for.
The introduction needs to felct my experience and can’t have any contractions within the assignement ex: you, your, can’t doesn’t, etc. )
Each outcome needs to have min. 600 words or 1.5 page, my instructor just changed the requirements.
Now the instructor requires me to provide more in depth on relating my expserience to my evidence in each outcome not just the conclusion.
Update: Hi Samantha – it is 600 words minimum. If I typed 500 words before I am sorry for the typo. 600 words is simply just a minimum starting point, but I typically recommend at least 1.5 pages per outcome to be able to convey your mastery to the evaluator. I find the more content, the better as it gives the evaluators more of an opportunity to find what they are looking for.
You do list the evidence at the end of your outcome discussion and refer the evaluator to find that document, but I would encourage you to include these documents into your discussion a bit more. Talk about why each document proves your learning and explain this to the evaluator. The more you can show them your mastery of the outcome, the more likely you are to get credit for the course. Please let me know if you have any other questions!
Hi Samantha – all outcome included. Thanks! Be sure your outcome discussion is at least 600 words (I prefer 1.5 pages to be safe) and also that you’ve included your evidence within the body of your document. Please see feedback for additional details of 2nd drafts in your first draft DOL submission (updated feedback in there).
Hi, Samantha,
You’ve put in a lot of work on this draft, and it shows! Many of the details we discussed in earlier drafts are much better now.
I do still see some stray capitals. For example–
I conducted Government Projects that impacted our mission effectiveness
Don’t capitalize the underlined words. Use the list I gave you before to proofread carefully. For each capitalized word in your paper, use the list to check it. If it fits one of the things on the list, then it’s correct to capitalize it. For example, the first word in a sentence is capped. People’s names are capped. The names of cities and states are capped. If we go down the list, item by item, we won’t find an item that covers the underlined phrase in the sentence above. So we know it should not be capitalized.
Here’s another example of extra capitals that should be lower case–
While there are some differences between Contract Management and Supplier Management, they are both intertwined in that it is impossible to undertake successful Supplier Management if the fundamental Contract Management practices are not followed.
Also, avoid contractions in formal academic writing. Instead of didn’t, write did not. This is a tone issue, not a grammar error, but it’s still important for these papers.
Also, it’s best to avoid you and your — stick to he/she/it/they or I/we. The problem with you and your is another issue of tone. These pronouns give the writing a directive tone that’s not suited to this kind of writing. Like contractions, they’re fine for other kinds of writing, just not here.
The reference citation looks great! Just use bold font for the word Reference at the top of that page, and that should be all you need.
Keep up the good work!
Theresa
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BMGT 365 – Some of your outcome listed incorrectly. This is from the most recent course syllabus. I know the wording is similar, but it needs to be identical to what the syllabus states. Here are the outcomes (see the ones in bold):
BMGT 317:
apply a decision making process to define decisions, discover root causes, and generate potential alternatives for effective decision making
assess the psychological bias limitations, and cultural influences, including stakeholder expectations, to countermeasure risk and uncertainty in decision making
Understand the factors that suggest value in individual and group decision making and when it is best to use one or the other
define critical success factors and generate relevant alternatives to enable selection of an optimal solution
work collaboratively with others to maximize ideas and minimize bias in decision making
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BMGT 365 – Some of your outcome listed incorrectly. This is from the most recent course syllabus. I know the wording is similar, but it needs to be identical to what the syllabus states. Here are the outcomes (see the ones in bold):
BMGT 317:
apply a decision making process to define decisions, discover root causes, and generate potential alternatives for effective decision making
assess the psychological bias limitations, and cultural influences, including stakeholder expectations, to countermeasure risk and uncertainty in decision making
Understand the factors that suggest value in individual and group decision making and when it is best to use one or the other
define critical success factors and generate relevant alternatives to enable selection of an optimal solution
work collaboratively with others to maximize ideas and minimize bias in decision making
BMGT 365
Use leadership theories, assessment tools, and an understanding of the role of ethics, emotional intelligence, cultural intelligence, competencies, values, and attitudes to evaluate and enhance personal leadership skills
Assess the interactions between the external environment and within an organization to foster responsible and effective leadership and organizational practices
Collaborate in teams utilizing effective communication, critical thinking and problem solving skills
Discuss and develop individual awareness, style and communication skills that enhance leadership skills Integrate and apply analytical principles and concepts of leadership to make strategic decisions.
This is a great second draft of your DOLs. Your intros, supporting evidence lists, conclusions and reference lists look great. You do a great job describing your roles and experiences, but it is important that you include stories, personal examples, and your evidence directly into the body of your paper. Each outcome should have at least 1 piece (preferably 2 pieces) of evidence discussed within the body of the discussion. You should direct the evaluator to this evidence by saying “Please see evidence A” and then describing why this particular piece of documentation shows your experience and mastery of this outcome. I do see that you do this, but be sure to be specific and include stories and examples, as well.
Samantha – Please revisit the matrix feedback and recent e-mail I sent to you before you continue with your DOLs. You did not include all outcomes, which you will need to do in order to submit for evaluation. It is also important to not work ahead in this class, as feedback from me is important to ensure you are creating the strongest DOL and portfolio. Please revisit the matrix, make the corrections I provided, and once that is ok-ed, then you can begin working on your DOLS. Reach out with any questions you have!
