Professor wrote, “For the first draft of your Researched Culture Narrative, I have reviewed it to make sure it met baseline expectations and have a few initial thoughts to share. I like how you are personalizing this essay with your experiences with Filipino culture. You also are taking time to look at its various aspects. From here, work to establish a stronger sense of purpose with this essay. What are you hoping to learn in your writing and research? Is it to better enrich your understanding? To give better context to your experiences? Share the beauty of this cultures with others? Be clear on this point. Also, more sources in the essay and more supportive research will help. Good luck!”
My emphasis is on being born and raised in chicago and taking the trip to the philippines were felt a culture shock with made me want to learn more.
