Can you correct this paper; Read the professors feedback and make changes accordingly
PROFESSORS COMMENTS- “I have started reading your paper and I wanted to get back to you with some points:
1- Although the assignment called for contracting service of your choice, I did expect it to be one of those discussed in the introduction: food, transportation, custodial, or business operations. Business officials are most challenged when it comes to replacing a traditional school district function with an outside contractor and these are the most common areas they are being asked to respond to. I tried to determine if contracting for data protection services works for this assignment and I don’t think it does because it is not a shift from district-run to contractor-run.
2- The school district (called ABC in the assignment) was supposed to be a fictional/anonymous place to allow for some freedom from the real details of a particular school district. Yours, Wyandanch, is a real place with very particular issues of their own.
3- I am not sure about the appropriateness of your sources for this assignment. I have looked at a few and they do not seem to apply to these topics.
4- Your section on Bolman & Deal’s four frames provides a good and clear overview, but it should be applied specifically to the issue of contracting, So what is there is very good, but without that connection it is not as helpful as intended.
5- The timeline is intended to provide you with a working model as a School District Business Leader for carrying out the contracting initiative — that is, a timeline for implementing change. It should include steps, stakeholders, opportunities for collaboration, final decisions for approving contracting services, etc. The same is true for the process.
If you review the assignment for SLC-4 and then one of the exemplars I think you will understand what I mean. I am open to talking over what you intended and how you were hoping to make it fit within this assignment, or you can redo the paper based on some of my comments here, the assignment, and the exemplars.”
