Write a paper to examine the various facets of entrepreneurship relevant to contemporary Russia. But your introduction and thesis should be significantly expanded and developed. As is, they don’t offer a clear sense of your paper or the details of your argument. You also tend to cite a large number of secondary sources without sufficiently analyzing or commenting on them. Remember that the goal is to present your own ideas and argument but those are drowned out by the abundance of quotes and other material. Shift the balance so that the focus is on your analyses.
