Please check the thesis statement and see if it is feasible. (1st sentence of introduction)
This paper starts with a thesis statement which is your original thought/opinion on a topic or a problem statement that asks a question that you must answer. The paper then takes other people’s work and uses that work to prove your thought/opinion. get other people
to agree with your thesis/original thought or answer the question you posed.
The literature review section needs to be about what the author(s) are teaching you and how you are applying what you learned from the literature to help you persuade the reader to agree with your thesis statement. Here, you used quotes from the author to make a
point about your topic, but that structure should be in the discussion of ideas section. I circled several authors that you used some specific thoughts from them. That information is better used in the discussion of ideas section
to make some changes in the structure of your paper.
***Please see comments and I need assistance with making the paper flow from the comments listed above. It is pages 4-7 (need assistance) and 12 & 13 to ensure it flows with comments as well. I have attached a rough draft to finalize and comments from the teacher.
