Please follow the below instruction and ensure to compile the below comments, Also in the attachment there are comments that need to be reviewed. the most important part that using the APA style to be used APA styled for referencing (author and year)
1. Your objective is to minimize the energy consumption and maximize the comfort of visualization. Therefore, multiobjective optimization might be a useful tool for improving your research and achieving your objective.
2. You might make your title more generic and take the office as a case study in your report.
3. Line spacing in the abstract is different. Make it similar to the text in the report.
4. You might consider optimizing the layout design of the office if it will improve your model.
5. On page 6 and 7, use “combined” instead of “combo” if this what you mean.
6. On page 6, points I, II, …. etc. seems objectives rather than research questions. They might be moved to Section 1.5.
7. On page 7, How you will compare the staff performance under the artificial daylighting, natural daylighting and standard electrical lighting. How you will measure the staff performance? ANOVA might be a useful tool for this comparison.
8. Section 1.6 is confusing and contains inconsistent items such as literature review, model and measures. Research gap can be explained in eth end of the literature review chapter.
9. On page 8, what do you mean with “the applicant will study the effect of different types of solar films on room lighting”? You can make it as a passive sentence or say “we”.
10. Section 1.8 is not really reflecting the assumptions. You mean the factors you will considered?
11. On page 11, the full definition of BMS should be mentioned.
12. On page 11, you mentioned that the power consumption will be reduced by 30%. How you estimated this percentage and why it is different from that in the abstract (10%)?
